Well um... I've been playing an MMORTS lately called Mech Hero that Zax introduced me to, and recently the alliance I joined up with kinda got forced into a war we didn't really want.
Uh... anyway, as a favor and a self test of sorts I decided to make a story based around the events happening. I know it's not particularly good and I'm a horrible author, but I feel like sharing it with you guys. I'm only sharing the first chapter as of now, but if you guys like It I guess I can share a bit more.
Chapter 1
Feedback and comments would be appreciated.
War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
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War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
I guess I can post the second chapter, I'd still appreciate any feedback anyone can give.
Read it here.
Read it here.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
Finished up Chapter 3,
Read it here~
Questions and comments are welcome. Criticism is greatly needed.
Read it here~
Questions and comments are welcome. Criticism is greatly needed.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
Wow... an utter lack of comments, really makes me feel welcome.
I'd post chapter four, but I'm unsure if people like this, or I'm just wasting my time by posting them here.
I mean I understand if they utterly suck, I'm not a professional by any means of the word, but just a small comment here or there would help, even a simple "Good" or something like that would be nice.
At the most, I've had two really good comments on it, and I thank those who let me know what they thought of it from the bottom of my heart. With that being said, please don't be shy to let me know what you think.
I'd post chapter four, but I'm unsure if people like this, or I'm just wasting my time by posting them here.
I mean I understand if they utterly suck, I'm not a professional by any means of the word, but just a small comment here or there would help, even a simple "Good" or something like that would be nice.
At the most, I've had two really good comments on it, and I thank those who let me know what they thought of it from the bottom of my heart. With that being said, please don't be shy to let me know what you think.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
Just because people don't comment doesn't mean it's a bad story.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
...no commentSnipeHeart wrote:Just because people don't comment doesn't mean it's a bad story.
Whee.
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Re: War with the Watchmen, A Mech Hero story.
Here is Chapter 4 and the current final chapter. I currently have no drive to continue it, but maybe sometime in the future I could.
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
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